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Final Reflection: Ten Weeks Later.

Ten weeks ago I stepped into a classroom, a classroom with people like myself who were student writers, who just like me were trying to make sense of their writing.  I myself was retaking the course due to not being able to finish the course last quarter.  I soon found myself suffering from lack of confidence but over the course even though it was not so easy for me, I soon realize how much more depth writing had and how my voice determined how my product would end up being.  This course has taught me so much over the assignments and pieces I have done for the class.

In my reflective piece, I wrote about how I liked to hold all work till the last minute and how my work usually shined during that time.  I completely disagree with that now.  It may sound hypocritical for turning in late assignments and not living to my full duties as a student of the class but I strongly believe that the work should no longer be put off, especially when it comes to writing.  Writing is full of ideas, thoughts and revision.

We write to make relevance of subjects as well to make relevant to ourselves.  I myself own a personal blog, not for writing but for my personal amusement, every now and then I would write an entry and publish it.  I managed to look back at some of the pieces I wrote and realized that even though my writing to me was good, it was merely acceptable.  This course Advanced Expository Writing allowed me to open my mind to the bigger picture.  I enjoyed the space given for my writing; I did not feel suffocated and felt as though I couldn’t be judged by others because they couldn’t see me but only hear my voice.

I soon began learning to write in a business format.  Something that was not only interesting to learn but also something that could be used in a professional setting sometime in the future.  It was one of the first assignments that made me write in a different way, a style in which I was able to think outside of the box.  Even before this assignment, I read an article from the New Yorker titled The Running Novelist by the author Murakmi. I usually don’t read articles that are not relevant but this spoke to me.  It spoke to me and awakened something that I had never felt in a long time.  Determination.  The article was about how the author Murakami left his life to become a writer and though he never mentions everything about his experience, he says how becoming a writer was something he did not plan but it just happened.  This article though not saying a lot spoke volumes.  It was something that said “hey, you never know what you will end up doing… things just happen.”  I have this articled downloaded onto my happy laptop now.  The class discussion on Murkami and the business template were extremely helpful in me growing and understanding what else I could do if I just looked outside of the box.

I believe that out of all the beneficial assignments, the most difficult assignment would probably be the rhetorical analysis.  I understood the Aristotelian Appeals; Ethos, Pathos, & Logos, but I was not quite sure if my analysis would be understood.  It is something I have never ever had to do and found it quite fun as much as frustrated by amount of thought I was trying to give it.  Being able to analyze a piece of text old or new is a great way of giving insight to the audience about what the piece is trying to say.  To see between the lines and expose the truth behind it and the meaning is what the rhetorical analysis assignment was meant to do.

Now even though this course was helpful, I couldn’t have done it without the books.  They were, Performing Prose: The Study and Practice of Style in Composition by Chris Holcomb and M. Jimmie Killingsworth and Rewriting: How to Do Things with Texts by Joseph Harris.  They seemed like regular textbooks at the time, something that could be looked in class and then put aside to collect dust.  However to a writer it is gold.   The books were extremely helpful because it helped the reader how to approach the style of writing in different ways.  It is highly recommended to take a look at these by books for aspiring student writers who are trying their best to make expand their writing style.  It has helped me look at writing and structure in a different way from hooking an audience to trying to reach to the audience.  I admit that did not always read the reading assignments but when I did; they were extremely insightful and helpful nonetheless.  Perhaps I should take a look back after finals, if procrastination does not ensue.

I enjoyed the blog because it helped me be able to publish my work without worrying about others.   I fear face to face critiques with someone who may be trying to be helpful, bashes you and your style.  This is what kept me from writing and keeping my writing off the bar, WordPress and even my own personal blog has now shown me that I do not have to live in fear and that I shouldn’t be ashamed of my writing.  This is something that is to be shared with the world and if a worldwide audience is what I can reach the sky is the limit.  I hope to continue writing in this blog, even perhaps doing other reviews, analysis, or even research.  As a writer with so much to share, why limit myself to a notebook or journal in where no one can see.  I could use WordPress as a platform to propel my writing and gain an audience, even if it is only a few.  I plan to use this blog as a “portfolio” of sorts to display my writing and let future employers see that I am more than capable of writing and thinking outside the box.

Before this blog is closed, I would like to thank Dr. Edlund.  Dr. Edlund is a professor at Cal Poly Pomona and probably one of the most knowledgeable when it comes to rhetoric.  Even though I struggled and did not do so well, he did not put me down but instead was patient because he believed that I could get the work done (even if he seemed to think I wouldn’t do it).   I cannot express how thankful that I was able to take this class with him and I have learned much more about myself as a writer ten weeks later, than I was ten weeks before.  I thank everyone who took their time to read this.  Have a good night!

Analyzing between the lines: Steve Jobs 2005 Commencement Speech at Stanford.

In 2005 Steve Jobs delivered the graduation commencement speech at Stanford.  He was there to speak about his life and how the choices he made back then, made him the man he came to be.  This speech was popular till the unfortunate passing of Steve Jobs, earlier this year.  When looking back at this speech, Steve Jobs goal was to pull the graduates about what their future has in store for them.  As the founder and the former CEO of Apple, he helped revolutionize the way we use and see technology.  Some forms of this are the movies by the company Pixar that he helped found as well as Apple products such as the I-series (Iphone, I pod, Ipad) in which we all use today.  I decide to analyze his speech in order to see if he uses the Aristotelian appeals.

Some may wonder what exactly the Aristotelian appeal is, worry not I will best define to my knowledge what this is.  The appeal is broken down into three categories: Ethos, Pathos, & Logos.  The first of this is Ethos this draws upon the persons morals or ethics would be the preferred word for Ethos.  For example, if I was support Euthanasia and gave a speech on the topic, one who listens may not be convinced if their Ethos (ethics) are not the same as mines.  The second approach is Pathos an idea that plays on emotion.  What pathos does is try to grab an emotional attention from speaker to audience, usually to get a reaction or to win the audience over to his/her side.  A good example is Martin Luther King’s “I Have A Dream” speech, his speech was able to draw out emotional support of the African Americans at that time.   Finally the last of these appeals is Logos, which is simply based on logic.  Logic plays along the audiences own logic so that they can make their own decisions after a speech or an argument.  One can say that two plus two equals five, a logos thinker will be able to deduce whether the speaker is wrong or right.  Ethos, Pathos, & Logos make up the Aristotelian Appeals.

Steve Jobs told the students how he never graduated from college and he had three stories to share with them.  The first, connecting the dots.  He first tells them about how he was put into adoption and eventually grew up entered college only to drop out of college.  He then proceeds to explain that he began dropping in on classes that met his appeal.  Steve Jobs then explains how he struggled with dropping in and that he took an interest in calligraphy, an interest he then later integrated into the Macintosh.  He further explains that you can’t connect the dots looking forward but by looking back and see if they connect into the future/present that you live in.  What Jobs does here is using his ethos to connect himself to the audience explaining about how he struggled just as much as the students in college and he knew it was not easy.

His second story was about love and loss.  Steve built Apple from the ground up and then got fired later in.  He thought he was cursed only to realize that being fired was a blessing in disguised.  He was able to pull himself together and create two companies NeXT and Pixar as well as finding his future wife.  In doing this he became what he once was; an innovator.  This became a turning point in his life because he was able to reestablish who he was by pulling himself out of the slump he was in.  He goes on about how Pixar was purchased by Apple and he ended up back in the company and how NeXT was used in Apple software.  His main point was that he found out what he loved and pursued it, even though he had hit “rock bottom” he strived to do what he loved and ended up back with his love as well as his future wife.  Pathos can be strongly be seen here.  He plays on his emotion to connect himself to the audience.  He also tells them that if these graduates were unsure of what they really wanted to do to keep looking and they will eventually know.  It can be agreed that graduating from college or anywhere is a big step into ones adult life.  Fear of not knowing how the future will turn out or how they have no idea what is in store, however Jobs connection to the audience was somewhat almost intimate as though father and child having a conversation.  It felt as though he was telling each and every one of them individually that everything would be okay in time.

His third story was about death.  He explains how during 2004 he was diagnosed to die and that he had four to five months to live and miraculously found out that he had a rare type of cancer that could be treated.  He goes on about how he was cured and hoped to live many more years.  As well as being grateful for life, he knew it could be taken away anytime.   He makes a very good comment “No one wants to die.  Even people who go to heaven don’t want to die to get there”.  It can be agreed that death is a big fear in many people and that Jobs acknowledges that death is unavoidable.  He encourages for people to live without regrets and basically says that don’t live life with regrets, it’s better to know than never knowing at all because of fear.

I did not analyze the third story because it has become very clear to me that Steve Jobs was using pathos to connect to his audience.  He was able to explain to the graduates about how we should connect the dots, how not all losses will stay losses and how death should not be the fear that paralyzes us from doing what we want to do.  I believe that Steve Jobs speech was very inspiring and that we should all look back to it if one ever feels a sense of loss.  As a reader I would say that Pathos played a big factor because I felt emotionally connected to what he was saying.  I hope that this analysis was helpful to all you readers.

Harry Potter and The Deathly Hallows Part 2

After 10 years since the first film, the final films came out for one of the biggest blockbuster releases of the summer.   I myself had ordered the double featured for midnight release which had let me watch part 1 and part 2 for a mere 20 dollars.   I decided that after the movie craze had subsided that I would do a review of the movie.

The plot revolves Harry Potter and his friends Ronald Weasley and Hermione Granger setting out to find Lord Voldemort’s Horcruxes which are objects that contain a piece of the evil wizard’s soul.  They search around the wizarding world in order to find the pieces that harbor bits of his soul and destroy them so that Harry the chosen one could fulfill his destiny and finish off Voldemort.  The film has many action packed scenes as well as some touching scenes as well.  I especially enjoyed the fact that the score was perfect to the films tone of pace.

As I watched the film I noticed many things missing from the books that the movie did not include but, due to the fact that they showed the War of Hogwarts, I didn’t care as much as I should have.  Things in the movie that stood out were the literary elements that were presented.  Literature geeks praised as the battle of good and evil went all out and even cheered when side character Neville Longbottom pulled the sword out of the sorting hat in order to… oops I said too much.  That scene itself referenced King Arthur pulling the sword from the stone.  Daniel Racliffe (Potter), Emma Watson (Granger), & Rupert Grint (Weasley) finally closed a large part of their life after the conclusion of this film.  I was moved as well seeing as there were no future books and no future movies that I had nothing from my childhood to look forward to anymore.  It was the epilogue in book and film that reminded that Harry Potter will live in the future generation of children.

Product Review Guide

I will be reviewing by using Jonathon Deamer’s 10 rules for writing a great review.

http://jonathandeamer.com/2007/06/12/how-to-write-great-reviews/

 

Review 1: Batman: Arkham Asylum

Product: Video Game

Review By IGN :

 http://ps3.ign.com/articles/101/1016585p1.html

Review August 21, 2009

IGN is targeting gamers with what they do best; give their reviews on all the upcoming and latest games.  The reviewer goes in dept with how the game plays out.  He talks about the story, setting, characters and all the extra activities to do throughout the game.  The Playstation 3 review is the same as the Xbox review though the only difference that the reviewer says that the graphics are sharper on the xbox but I can strongly disagree.  They talk about how the player takes control of the famous hero and use his skill to take out the villains throughout the game.  A strong appraisal to the game was the voice actors, many who acted in the famous Batman The Animated Series.  IGN helps define the pros and cons of the game and the article is strongly recommended for those who are looking on opinion for this game or any game in general.

Review 2: The Lion King 3D

Product: Film

Review By Elizabeth Weitzman:

 http://www.nydailynews.com/entertainment/movies/lion-king-3d-review-disney-classic-grand-visual-effects-pack-a-punch-article-1.958936

September 17, 2011

The review is the writer disliking the fact that Disney is cashing in a pre-made product.  The author Elizabeth Weitzman,  talks about movie in outline form.  She talks about the intimacy of the movie and many theme it represents two being: life and death.  She says that even though she feels as though the ticket is too much (it really wasn’t), that it was worth the money she spent to go watch the film.  I believe that her review was very helpful and informative.  She lets the audience know that many of the young children that are now adult can see it again and her only complaint really is that she is afraid the ticket prices are too high. Overall her review is just informative if nothing more.

Review 3: IPhone 4

Product: Gadget/Phone

Review By Joshua Topsky

http://www.engadget.com/2010/06/22/iphone-4-review/

January 22nd, 2010

The review goes over the phone overall.  He speaks about the display, camera, hardware, and design.   The audience clearly is after tech geeks and other people who are looking into purchasing the phone.  Being an owner of the IPhone 3GS I found this review to be slightly helpful because I got to see what got upgraded and what advantages were there to purchasing a new phone.  I appreciate that the reviewer goes over the time to do specs check up and how he makes sure we are able to understand what he is saying.  The only criticism that can be given is that if he is truly a tech specialist among these things and that unless he has a credentials elsewhere I can not just only trust his opinion.

Business Letter Ex. 2

In this second letter, I write to the students and their parents being the secondary audience. This letter differs from that of the teachers by way it will be written, I write to them in order to make them think they have a choice but in reality they don’t.

 

Paul Cao

13606 Elwyn Dr.

Azusa, CA 91702

November 15, 2011

 

Parents & Guardians

123 Muffin Lane

Azusa, CA 91702

Greeting Parents & Guardians:

Good Evening, My name is Paul Cao and I’m the current acting principle of Pallet Town High School.  I am writing to let you know that I will be implementing a ten minute free write before taking all major tests.  This will be done in order for the students to able to circulate out all the stress they feel onto their paper.

I understand that most of the students will think of it as a chore, but in reality think about it; Would you rather be forced to write or have the knowledge that there will some type of activity before the culminating test?  It has been proven that if a student is forced to write, they will either refuse or not write at all.  Therefore I have decided to give them the “heads-up” if you will.

Within the ten minute free write period, I urge all students to try and write as much as possible.  It doesn’t have to be anything in specific, just write out their worries about the test and add anything personal if needed to get it out of their system,  I hope this method is effective for all test takers that know they can do well but do bad on the tests.

Thank You,

Paul Cao

Acting Principal of Pallet Town High School.

Business Letter Ex. 1

This first letter is written to teachers as  I take the role of acting principle.  My goal here to convince the teachers to have their students free write for ten minutes before taking a test because of better results.

Paul Cao

13606 Elwyn Dr.

Azusa, CA 91702

November 16, 2011

Collegues

123 Muffin Street

Azusa, CA 91702

To All Teachers

I know that this late into the season, we are all tired from the grading and deserve a well earned break this coming December.  I write this because I have decided to implement a ten minute free write period to all the high school students before test taking.  I understand that some of you will not like the sound of the idea, but hear me out.  After reading an article about how students would excel a little better after the free write, I think it does not hurt us in any way to try this method.

Due to the changes I will have in store for the school, I have decided that it will be best for you not to have to grade the free writes.  It will take much time off your hands and you guys will not have to do much more.   This method is optional and I suggest that if you would not like your whole class to partake in this, than at least think about giving this method to the worst test takers and see if they do any better.  I will have someone from the office collect these free writes and collect the scores of their former test and test given with the free write and see if results occur.

I hope that this method turns out for the best, and if it does that you will all see this in a positive light.

Thank You,

Paul Cao

Acting Principle of Pallet Town High School

How to Write a Business Letter

Whenever I am given an assignment, the first place I go to first is the online world usually through Google.  Looking for information in a textbook or in a library is usually outdated, why online resources are usually up to date with the latest and greatest bits of information that we use to intergrate into our daily lives. I looked through three different websites on how to write a proper business letter.

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/653/01/ – Owl Purdue was most useful website I discovered. It was updated and had everything I needed to know on how to write a proper business letter and I figured out how to make it sound professional as possible. This page is highly recommended for those looking to start somewhere.

http://www.writing-business-letters.com/business-letter-of-introduction.html – Writing Business Letters was the second website I clicked on and looked as more useful then the others but less useful than Purdue. It has the standard information. Interestingly enough it has a advertisement for 3001 Business & Sales Letters. Unfortunately with the way are with money, I don’t think anyone would be interested in purchasing letter techniques.

http://www.eduers.com/businessletter/index.html – I used the last one because it does have a sample and because it was suggested from the writing class. A checklist is the first thing you see when you click on the page. I found it useful to make sure I followed the “guidelines” or a “standard” in order to make sure I do my letter correctly.

Personal Reflection

This is not class material.

So lately I have been on this crazy ego trip. I think it happened about a month ago when I was talking to my friends Jackie and Kyle over lunch. We had been talking about the most random things when Jackie started dropping the F-bomb. After he proceeded to defend his actions and explain how it is okay to be an asshole. Maybe I took it too literally because not too far after I went on this ego boost. At first I did not notice the personality change but it was not long until someone complained about it. I had become the scum of the earth; I had no emotional connection over any offensive thing I would do or say. However after I took a few reality checks from people today, I decided to do some ego control. It did not really help because I ended up calling this Hufflepuff I know a bitch (as a joke) and then after realizing what I did, I had a “heart to heart” with this Hufflepuff kind of. Needless to say I think it’s time to return to “normal” whatever “normal” may be.

On a side note
I don’t do well with people jumping out at me.